The char t beloew gives information about the purposes of visits to five cities inthe UK in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reposting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the different reasons people visited five UK cities in 2013.
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, London and Edinburgh seem to be
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holiday
destination
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while
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Birmingham and Manchester serve more of a business purpose.  The chart shows that Edinburgh is the most visited city for vacations with nearly 67% of all its
visitors
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being there for the holidays,
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it proposes a less significant effect from a business
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perspective
where only 10% go there for
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matters.
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17% of
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are there for social reasons,
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while
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a small
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percentage
are there for other factors. The graph
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demonstrates that London sees approximately half of its
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during breaks, with significantly
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people going to visit relatives, unlike Liverpool, where a fair amount of its
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are there for family and friends at nearly 26%. 
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, Manchester and Birmingham seem to be more
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formal settings as they see their peak percentages of about 32% and 48%, respectively, in relation to business justifications. Fewer people head there for leisure, rather it appears that social settings are more common with statistics standing at about 26% and 23% respectively
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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