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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the best ten countries on how much they generated and used electricity per
billion
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kWh
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 in 2014.
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, electricity usage increased steadily for
China
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 and The United
States
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 but decreased for the others. Despite
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 most of them produced more than they consumed, except from Germany. During that period, power energy Fluctuated from one country to another, but there was a dramatic increase in
China
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 and the United
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,which attained their peak point in creating energy with 5398 and 4099, respectively. In regards to using it, they exceed the others with 5322
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 in
China
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 and 3866
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 in The United
States
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. They are the top two countries when you compare them to the others because the average producing power was 561.2 for France and 936.2 for Japan.
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, the heat usage followed the same patterns, which made more than they created except from Germany, in other ,words
China
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 produced 5398 and consumed 5322. So it created 5398
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kWh
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 in
China
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 and 4099
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kWh
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 in the United
States
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, which fell to 1057
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kWh
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 for Russia, it kept falling down through the period until it reached a point of 485.1 in Korea.
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, there was an exception, Germany used more energy with a value of 582.5 and created 526.6.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kwh, china, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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