The diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather goods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather goods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The diagram shows the method by which animal skins are made to produce the items.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are 11 stages in the process,starting with drying
skin
and ending with making leather products . In the first
stage
,the animal
skin
is dried under the sun for about one to two days and transported to the factory. Once
this
dried
skin
is in the factory, it is washed with water and lime in order to get rid of the dirt.In the following
stage
, the
skin
is soaked in lime so as to remove the oils and fats before going through the
stage
which is called the flattening
stage
.
Then
, the hide of animals is flattened by a roller machine for the purpose of having a flat surface. After that, the flattened
skin
goes through the tanning
stage
. At
this
point, the
skin
is soaked in a chemical which is called Tannin (a mixture of water and vegetable matter) Once
this
stage
is completed,leather is polished so that it looks shiny.
Finally
,the polished
skin
is sent to the factory to produce leather items
such
as bags,balls, and sports equipment.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words skin, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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