The chart below shows the proportion of males and females in Malaysia who commonly do physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary. Write at least 150 words

The chart below shows the proportion of males and females in Malaysia who commonly do physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

Write at least 150 words
The bar chart compares the proportion of males and females of differing
age
groups
who frequently undertook physical activity in 2010.
Overall
,
while
the Malaysian population keeps fit in general, a higher proportion of women than
men
exercised in 2010, with some
further
differences between
age
groups
. Middle-aged females were the most likely to work out,
while
men
, those aged 15 to 24 tended to do the most physical activity. In terms of
men
’s exercise habits, younger
men
were much more likely to exercise than older
men
with 52.8% of those aged under 24 exercising as opposed to only around 40% of older
age
groups
By contrast
, around half of all women in all
age
groups
reported keeping fit, especially those aged between 35 and 64 at around 53%. The exception was the youngest
age
group in which only 47.7 per cent of women exercised compared to 52.8% of
men
.
Similarly
, for people 65 and over, approximately 47% of both sexes were recorded regularly working out.
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