The line graph provides information about the amount of books that were borrowed in four differen months in 2914 from 4 village libraries, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph provides information about the amount of books that were borrowed in four differen months in 2914 from 4 village libraries, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
The line graph provides information about the amount of
books
that were borrowed in four
differen
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different
months in 2914 from 4 village libraries, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of
books
, by type, that were borrowed over
this
time.
Overall
, during
this
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period,
books
taken from Sutton Wood town library reached 300, with all three towns
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much fewer of them. In June, fifty
books
were borrowed from Church Mount village,
as well as
from West Eaton the amount of
books
taken was the same. As can be seen from the graph,
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September) they ended with
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result.
Although
it is clear from the data that
books
borrowed from the Ryeslip experienced a steady fall, from
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three hundred
books
to nearly a half. As is presented in the pie chart 43
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of
books
were
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genre,
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is close to
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of all types. Meanwhile, for the
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fiction
, history and science
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the pattern appears slightly different. They are just under 20
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.
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type makes
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very small proportion of borrowed
books
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