Few people think that it is important for collecting personal information such interest, hobbies and material status. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Collecting personal
data
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might be necessary for some
people
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. They
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usually
collecting
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collect
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information
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such
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as
interest
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interests
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,
hobby
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hobbies
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, and material
data
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.
This
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can help them to remember about their personalization.
On the other hand
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,
people
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should be worried
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about sharing
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their
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to
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others
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. Sometimes, companies want to know about our personal
information
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for background checking criteria. Those can be our
interest
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interests
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,
hobby
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hobbies
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, or material
status
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.
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, our interest can help them to place the best position for us when we are working in the office.
Second,
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material
status
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is being used when companies try to dig down our financial history. Sometimes, financial
status
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can be done from the bank so it will support their
data
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to hire us.
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,
hobby
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hobbies
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can be shared by
people
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who have
same
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the same
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leisure
activity
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activities
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.
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condition can create other opportunities for growing the connection around the
people
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in the office or something more.
On the contrary
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, sharing our personal
information
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might be dangerous because
people
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can use our
data
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to do something malicious. To illustrate, our material
status
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can be seen by
others
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. Sometimes, bad guys can sell our
data
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on the dark web so they will manipulate our
data
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to buy or loan something on the internet without our permission.
Besides
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, a lot of activities called phishing can be generated by bad guys for impersonating us.
This
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situation really makes
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experience so we must
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be aware
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and protect our personal
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securely.
To conclude
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, there are two sides
from
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to
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sharing or collecting our personal
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to
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with
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others
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. For me, it will be better, if we protect our
data
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or
information
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securely.
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means we do not have to share
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personal
information
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to
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others
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unless they are trusted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personalization
  • Tailoring
  • Preferences
  • Targeted marketing
  • Efficiency
  • Insights
  • Strategies
  • Fraud prevention
  • Privacy invasion
  • Data security risks
  • Manipulation
  • Exploitation
  • Discrimination
  • Consent
  • Sensitive information
  • Unauthorized access
  • Data breaches
  • Third parties
  • Discriminatory practices
  • Fairly
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