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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is should women be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
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whether should
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women
 be allowed to join the army, the
navy
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Navy
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 and the air force. Personally, I tend to think that
woman
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women
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 should be allowed to enter military service.
Firstly
, it is well known that
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most
of
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the
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women
 are successful in all
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the ways
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 that they enter. What I mean here is multitasking, emotionally strong, female leaders show amazing success.
For example
,
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a working
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 mother has to get up early, make sure that the house is cleaned before she leaves for work, wash all clothes, make breakfast for her kids, etc.
This
 shows that
women
 are amazing at making multiple things at once.
On the other hand
, other people are completely against
this
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The most
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of
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the
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men are better
in
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at
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 wars and strategies than
women
. The Navy needs harsh training and living conditions that
women
 can barely survive. Take
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 example, spending 1 week without food or water in
desert
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the desert
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. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned above, since
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qualities that
i
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 mentioned above are very important,
helpful
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and helpful
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,
therefore
, I completely agree that
women
 should be allowed to join military organizations. The army will benefit more from girls
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than what he may lose.
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