The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
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bar charts demonstrate the percentage of men and women and
also
four age groups watching
game
shows and reality shows in Australia.
Overall
,
although
reality shows are more popular among females, both genders are equally attracted to
game
shows.
Moreover
, people who are older than 45, watch both genres more than the others.
According to
the charts, 60
percent
of both genders watch
game
shows
however
, just about 35
percent
of men are interested in the other TV program which is 2 times less than the proportion of women which is in the region of 70.
Following
this
, the same equal proportion of people older than 45 watch reported TV programme genres.
Furthermore
, half of the youngest group who are between 16 to 24 years old watch
game
programmes which is a similar proportion for them attracted to the other
genre
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genres
show examples
.
In addition
to
this
, individuals aged between 35 to 45 have a noticeable difference in watching these shows
and
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apply
show examples
about 70
percent
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per cent
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of them are interested in watching reality shows
while
just about 40
percent
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per cent
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of them watch the other show. A similar pattern can be seen for the second age group.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words game, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just about" was used 2 times.
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