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Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#schools #time #subjects #history #people #skills #students #job
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 of time teaching conventional material
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 think that they should spend more time in taughting
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find a work. Teaching a skill will help in
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 of ways in the future and give the students more options.
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traditional
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curriculum
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 normal
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 at school
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 the students more options in the future
such
 as learning sports, cooking,
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carpeting
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sweeping
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skills
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business
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assists
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traditional
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 like
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mathematics
, history, biology..etc. All of them will help with the foundation and
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gaining
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for example
 learning
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mathematics
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 basis. In conclusion,
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majority
 of teaching
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facilities
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subjects
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rather
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skills
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 a daily basis.learning
skills
 help in finding a job
while
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subjects
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 provide the
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necessary
 information. I totally agree that
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 should
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focus
 on teaching
skills
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 learning normal
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. charging the
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student
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 future.
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