The charts below show the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008

The charts below show the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008
The presented pie charts provide information about the proportion of people between 23 and 65 ages
according to
their jobs in
the
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one specific town and the whole United Kingdom country in
the
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2008.
Overall
, in the UK town called Ashby
leader
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profession in the market is Personal service,
however
the proportion of unemployed people
were
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leading to
job
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market.
To begin
, in
the
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Ashby occupations related to professional
work
was
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8% of
total
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workforce. The indicator for technical
work
equaled
to
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9%. The interest toward
to
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shop
work
amounted to 14% which was the same as
unemployment
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rate in the town.
The construction
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Construction
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work
, office
work
, and personal service were the most attractive occupations during
the
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2008 which were respectively 16%, 18%, and 21%. In the UK as a whole, construction
work
was
least
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interested
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occupation and the proportion was equal to 10%. The rate for unemployed people was
also
10%. The
figure
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for shop
work
and professional
work
were 13% and 14% respectively. The popular professions in
the
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2008 were jobs that
are
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related to Office
work
, Personal Service, and technical
work
and the rates were 19%, 17% and 17% respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Occupation
  • Distribution
  • Economy
  • Local vs National
  • Major employer
  • Educational institution
  • Balanced distribution
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Implications
  • Economic development
  • Social services
  • Educational planning
  • Employment landscape
  • Geographic location
  • Urban dynamics
  • Rural dynamics
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