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A big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a wide range of workers prefer a high
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 without considering whether
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 if it's suitable or not. Personally, In my opinion, I agree with that, A big
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 is more interesting than
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 satisfaction. I feel that for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
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 in the new generations seeking for high paid jobs to have a pretty lifestyle that includes retirement, health insurance, and more.
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 , many engineers, teachers, doctors, etc. they looking for a big
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 to cover their expenses,
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 , in French,
people
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work
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 extra hours to make more money
instead
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 of working for
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 satisfaction with a small
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 they will suffer to live that life they love.
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 , there is a unique section like artists and sporty
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 , etc. They have no problem if they
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 daily without a high income, but, the most important thing in
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 category, are their mental health and well-being.
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 , in an interesting,
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 You feel more positive and happy, every day you wake up to your
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 .
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 , my sister has been working for a company that designs only dairies and planners, She looks very excited each time she heads to her
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 Even though the
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 is a little low.
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 , it is frequently said that a high income is more important, Because, life become more hectic and need more money to pay bills, etc.
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 a satisfying
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 is handsome but
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 suffer with a small
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 in reality.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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