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You have experienced some issues with a colleague who recently started working at your company. explain what the issue are how other colleagues feel how to resolve the issue.

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Dear MR Singh With all due respect, I am writing
this
 letter on behalf of other colleagues that we are facing some difficulties with the new employee. Being a team leader, I have assigned job roles and duties to every single one in my team but John the new engineer is not able to do his task on time. Most of the time he
is indulged
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 in gossiping, backbiting and making plans for parties which results in
waste
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a waste
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 of a lot of time. ,
Moreover
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 others have
also
 reached out to me and have sent me a few written letters complaining about the same.
Therefore
,to rectify the situation I believe either we can give him a new job role in some other department or we can give him official notice and
in addition
 to
this
 we can
also
 give him some vocational training on improvement in the job. I am waiting for your prompt response. Yours sincerely jass
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