The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009 in Japan, US and other countries.

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009 in Japan, US and other countries.
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The bar chart illustrates
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many
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number
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of hybrid
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vehicles
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sales
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from 2006 to 2009 in different countries across the world.
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, the data on total
sales
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in 2009 were twice as many as the
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in 2006, from 360.000 in 2006 to 740.000 in 2009.
Japan
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country which rose sharply, at 340.000
vehicles
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and it became the top
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transport in 2009. In 2006, the transportation trading in
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stood at 250.000.
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, there was a peak in numbers at 350.000 in 2007.
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, during the next 2-year period, the
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of
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dropped significantly from 350000 to nearly 280000. The
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of trade
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in
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and other countries
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at 50.000 in 2006.
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, there was a gradual rise in
Japan
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between 2006 and 2008, reaching 75.000 and 100.000, respectively. In 2009,
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rocketed to 350.000 in
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.
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, the
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of
sales
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in other countries increased steadily for over four years, at 110,000
vehicles
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in 2009.
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