The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.
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The provided bar charts illustrate the shares of males and females in employment in
Sweden
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,
Canada
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and South
Korea
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in 2005 and after ten years. 
Overall
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, we can see that in 2005, the largest number of both men and
women
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who had a job lived in
Sweden
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,
while
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in 2015, the highest number of males who had a job was in South
Korea
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and in
Canada
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the vast majority of
women
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were in employment.
According to
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the first bar chart, in 2005, almost four out of every 5 of all men in
Sweden
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had a job.
However
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, the number of
women
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who were employed was under twice as low. In
Canada
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, the share of male employees was just over 60% and the share of female employees was just under 20% smaller. In the remaining South
Korea
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, the proportion of male labourers accounted for nearly 75%,
whereas
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the portion of female labourers was 2,5 times low, accurately(30%). Regarding to second bar chart, in 2015, the situation in the three countries was different. In
Sweden
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and
Canada
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, working men contributed 70%,
while
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working
women
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in the former comprised nearly half of all
women
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and in the latter constituted nearly 55%. In South
Korea
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, male workers made up slightly less than 80%
as well as
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, and female workers made up approximately 35%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, canada, korea, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts
  • percentages
  • employment
  • countries
  • 2005
  • 2015
  • trends
  • differences
  • changes
  • men
  • women
  • variations
  • patterns
  • significant
  • observations
  • summarize
  • findings
  • predictions
  • future trends
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