Question -Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available
Dear manager,
Thank you for
providind
me with a chance to organize a retirement party for Correct your spelling
providing
the
colleague. I am writing to let you know a suitable date and venue. Correct article usage
a
In addition
, a brief overview about the available food and entertainement
options is noted.
The coming week is a long weekend and Correct your spelling
entertainment
according to
me, Saturday night, which is 21st September is a suitable date. Further
, 8 p.m. shall be a suitable time to begin
as most of the employees will be spending time with their respected
families during the day.
Being an outgoing and social person, I would like to suggest "Befikre" located on Replace the word
respective
the
Torbram Road, Mississauga as our venue. Correct article usage
apply
Firstly
, it open
till late Add a missing verb
is open
night
, and Change preposition
at night
secondly
, close to our accomodations
.
On the weekend night, they feature a band till 11 p.m. and later we can enjoy and dance Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
on
the DJ music. Change preposition
to
Although
, it is a mexican
restaurant and the food is quite expensive Change the capitalization
Mexican
but
the quality they offer is unbeatable. I would suggest Correct word choice
apply
to go
for Change the verb form
going
buffet
system Correct article usage
a buffet
instead
of ordering single dishes.
Thank you for your consideration
Yours faithfully
HarshveerSubmitted by harshveermangat141 on
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task response
Ensure that the letter addresses all aspects of the task, including the recommendation of food and entertainment options.
coherence and cohesion
The letter lacks a proper greeting and closing, and the coherence and cohesion could be improved by organizing the ideas into distinct paragraphs.