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Question -Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available

#-your #manager #party #colleague #company #date #time #venue #food #entertainment #options
Dear manager, Thank you for
providind
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providing
 me with a chance to organize a retirement party for
the
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a
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 colleague. I am writing to let you know a suitable date and venue.
In addition
, a brief overview about the available food and
entertainement
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entertainment
 options is noted. The coming week is a long weekend and
according to
 me, Saturday night, which is 21st September is a suitable date.
Further
, 8 p.m. shall be a suitable time
to begin
 as most of the employees will be spending time with their
respected
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 families during the day. Being an outgoing and social person, I would like to suggest "Befikre" located on
the
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Torbram Road, Mississauga as our venue.
Firstly
, it
open
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is open
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 till late
night
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at night
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, and
secondly
, close to our
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
. On the weekend night, they feature a band till 11 p.m. and later we can enjoy and dance
on
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 the DJ music.
Although
, it is a
mexican
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Mexican
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 restaurant and the food is quite expensive
but
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the quality they offer is unbeatable. I would suggest
to go
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going
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 for
buffet
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a buffet
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 system
instead
 of ordering single dishes. Thank you for your consideration Yours faithfully Harshveer
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task response
Ensure that the letter addresses all aspects of the task, including the recommendation of food and entertainment options.
coherence and cohesion
The letter lacks a proper greeting and closing, and the coherence and cohesion could be improved by organizing the ideas into distinct paragraphs.
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