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the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
#show #percentage #water #purposes #six #areas #world
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 group of pie-charts represents the usage of
water
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 in percentage for the various needs in the six parts of the earth. There are six pie charts
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each representing an area. The different purposes shown in each chart are Industrial
use
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, Agricultural
use
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 and Domestic
use
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.
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an
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 detailed picturisation
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usage
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 of
water
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 by given territories. The highest used utility of
water
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 is mostly for Farming and Agriculture. For domestic
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,
water
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 is consumed lower when compared to others.
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America and Europe are the areas, where
water
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 is consumed more for industrial and corporate cases, than any other parts.
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, the Asian and African continents
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 the lands for agriculture. Around 88% of
water
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 is used for it in those places.
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South America marks itself as the highest domestic
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 consumer. By calculating averages, 22.50%, 65.83% and 11.67% percentages of
water
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 are used for industrial, agricultural and domestic
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 by all of these six parts of the world. These inferences
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 the consumption for domestic
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is
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 less than all other usages.
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,
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agriculture is the
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biggest consumer and the industrial purpose moderates.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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