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The chart showes the hour spent per week on sport and exercise by young people in england

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The bar graph given depicts how active young people are in England, expressed in hours per
week
. As an
overall
 trend, it is observed that males are seemingly more active than females. The main difference observed between 16-
24 year old
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men
 and
women
 is that a higher number of
women
 lead a more sedentary lifestyle compared to
men
. About 2/5th of
women
 don't play any sport
whereas
 about 4/5th of
men
 spend
atleast
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at least
 a few
mins
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minutes
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 a
week
 engaging in physical activity. A similar difference is noticed in youth who are physically very active with about 15% of
men
 spending > 7 hours a
week
 and only about 5% of
women
 contributing to the same A major finding in the chart is that
majority
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 of the young adults
workout
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work out
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 for
atleast
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at least
 1-3
hrs
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hours
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 a
week
. About 1/5th of boys and girls fall
in
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this
 category In conclusion, it can be said that males are physically fitter than females in England.
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