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The chart below shows the percentage of children between 5 and 14 years old who played sports in Australia in 2003 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of children between 5 and 14 years old who played sports in Australia in 2003 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following chart presents data pertaining to the percentage of Australian young
people
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 participating in different sports in 2003.
Overall
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, swimming became the most popular sport activity among youths, followed by soccer.
However
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, the non-playing category placed a quite significant portion
while
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 the majority of young
people
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 in Australia participated in physical exercise.
To begin
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 with, swimming was the most popular sport exercise with twenty per
cent
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 of
people
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. Following that, soccer became the second most popular with fifteen per
cent
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 of folks which is slightly below swimming activity.
On the other hand
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, the youth participation in martial arts and athletics served a similar percentage with around seven per
cent
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people
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 respectively.
In addition
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, cricket became the least popular sports activity among youth in Australia.
Moreover
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, despite the majority of young
people
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 in Australia actively participating in sports, the non-playing category had a quite significant percentage with twenty-five per
cent
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 of youth.
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