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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons relevant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons relevant
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of water consumption for various purposes in six different global areas.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Asia, Africa, and South
America
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 spent the majority of water for
grew
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growing
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 the plant,
while
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 North
America
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 and Europe used
for
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it for
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Correct article usage
the menufacturing
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menufacturing
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manufacturing
 process.
To begin
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with
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,with
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 the primary purpose in both
of
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apply
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Asia, Africa, and South
America
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were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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agricultiral
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agricultural
 aim, which
this
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 figure was more than 70% in each area. The remaining target combined around 15%, with the exception of South
America
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that
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which
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 reached almost 30%. Turning to North
America
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 and Europe, the water was spent in
these area
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this area
these areas
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spent
Verb problem
apply
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for industries,
these figure
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this figure
these figures
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 indicated at around half. Meanwhile, the percentage that were
spend
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spent
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 in orchard and households were
secound
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second
 and the
least
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lowest
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 ranking.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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