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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The pie chart
give
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gives
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 information about
changing
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that
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in
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 the
propotion
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proportion
promotion
 of
bylingual
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bilingual
by lingual
 UK
students
 in university where located in England, in 2000 and 2010.
It is clear that
 the
English
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number of English
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 speakers who can speak other languages are
incceased
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increased
.
While
,
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apply
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 The number of people who can use other languages except English is
decreasd
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decreased
.
First,
Students
 who can use two other languages are increased from 10 per
cent
 to 15 per
cent
. And Spanish speakers
rised
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rose
raised
risen
 5 per
cent
 compared
in
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to
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 2000
,
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apply
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 and reached
at
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apply
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35 per
cent
 in 2010. The number of people who can speak
languges
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languages
 other than Spanish, German and
Frech
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French
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also
go
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goes
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 up 5 per
cent
.
Whereas
, French-speaking
students
 in 2001 decreased 5 per
cent
campraring
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comparing
 2000. Like
this
, the
propotion
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proportion
 of university
students
 who cannot speak any other language
expcept
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except
 English
go
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goes
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 down.
However
, the number of
students
 who
able
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are able
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 to use German is the same in 2000.
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