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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of the destination of export goods in three distinct countries, in 2010.

The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of the destination of export goods in three distinct countries, in 2010.
The pie chart shows the number of
the
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apply
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destinations
of
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for
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 export goods, in Argentina, Mexico and Chile in 2010.
Overall
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, it witnessed Mexico send a huge amount of goods to the
USA
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 and
minimal
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a minimal
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 proportion to other Countries. Argentina and Chile were exported
similarly
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 in
the
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that
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 period of time.
To begin
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, Argentina had 38% of
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the
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proportion to Latin America at the beginning, followed by Europe was 26%. The
USA
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 and others were at under 20%,
whereas
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, the
USA
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 accounted for the highest percentage of freight from Marico at 62%. It was the dominant country controlling two-thirds of the markets and other Countries
such
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 as the
USA
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 and
others
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were at 16% and 20% over the term. In the same year, geographical split of exports, Latin America obtained a whole of 31% from Chile followed by Europe
retch up
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which increased
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 their
imported
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imports
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at
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to
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 30% and
remaining
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the remaining
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 courting
hold
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held
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 less than 20%
at the end
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 of the year in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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