The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The above bar chart
demonstrate
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number
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a number
the number
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of
stundents
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students
in 2005
when
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who
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choosing
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chose
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different university subjects.
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be comparing between
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the the
males
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male
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and
females
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female
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numbers per
subject
. It is clear to see that law,
litrature
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literature
, and the arts have the lowest numbers of the total number of
students
comparing
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to other subjects. Male
students
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student's
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figures in law and
litrature
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literature
are higher than female
students
;
however
,
the arts
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the subject of the art
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subject
showed an
oppasite
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opposite
trend with female
students
around four times the number of male
students
On the other hand
,
sciences
,
mathmatics
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mathematics
, social
sciences
, and languages have higher numbers of total genders.
Mathmatics
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Mathematics
,
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apply
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and
sciences
male
students
were
domainating
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dominating
.
While
,
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social
sciences
and languages were
domainted
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dominated
by
females
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female
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students
.
Lastly
,
humanties
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humanities
subject
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subjects
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were selected by both female and male
students
equally. In conclusion, female
students
were leaning towards social
sciences
, languages, and the arts.
While
, male
students
were leaning more towards
sciences
,
mathmatics
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mathematics
,
litreture
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literature
, and law subjects.
Humanties
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Humanities
subject
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subjects
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were equally
intresting
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interesting
to both genders.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words subject, students, sciences with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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