The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The above bar chart
demonstrate
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demonstrates
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
stundents
in 2005 Correct your spelling
students
when
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who
choosing
different university subjects. Wrong verb form
chose
This
essay will be comparing between
the the Wrong verb form
compare
males
and Fix the agreement mistake
male
females
numbers per Fix the agreement mistake
female
subject
.
It is clear to see that law, litrature
, and the arts have the lowest numbers of the total number of Correct your spelling
literature
students
comparing
to other subjects. Male Change the form of the verb
compared
students
figures in law and Change noun form
student's
students'
litrature
are higher than female Correct your spelling
literature
students
; however
, the arts
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the subject of the art
the subject of the arts
subject
showed an oppasite
trend with female Correct your spelling
opposite
students
around four times the number of male students
.
On the other hand
, sciences
, mathmatics
, social Correct your spelling
mathematics
sciences
, and languages have higher numbers of total genders. Mathmatics
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Mathematics
,
and Remove the comma
apply
sciences
male students
were domainating
. Correct your spelling
dominating
While
,
social Remove the comma
apply
sciences
and languages were domainted
by Correct your spelling
dominated
females
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female
students
. Lastly
, humanties
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humanities
subject
were selected by both female and male Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
students
equally.
In conclusion, female students
were leaning towards social sciences
, languages, and the arts. While
, male students
were leaning more towards sciences
, mathmatics
, Correct your spelling
mathematics
litreture
, and law subjects. Correct your spelling
literature
Humanties
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Humanities
subject
were equally Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
intresting
to both genders.Correct your spelling
interesting
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