The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.
This
picture gives us some information about Town
A and Town
B which people
changed their occupations between 1960 and 2010.
First,
In 1960 the number of people
who worked in three different jobs almost had a balance in Town
A only fewer people
worked in services
and more people
worked in manufacturing and then
most people
in Town
B did manufacturing jobs and only 10 percentage
of Replace the word
per cent
people
did services
jobs and 20 percentage
worked as sales.
In 2010 over 64 percentage
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per cent of
people
worked in the services
sector in Town
A and people
who worked in manufacturing had sharp
decrease of less than 20 Add an article
a sharp
percentage
. In Replace the word
per cent
Town
B, most people
still worked at manufacturers but the number of services
and sales had increased.
In conclusion, the working environment has changed in two
cities for 50 years more Correct article usage
the two
people
prefer to work in sales or work in the services
sector.Submitted by yao20010210 on
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