The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.
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picture gives us some information about
Town
A and
Town
B which
people
changed their occupations between 1960 and 2010.
First,
In 1960 the number of
people
who worked in three different jobs almost had a balance in
Town
A only fewer
people
worked in
services
and more
people
worked in manufacturing and
then
most
people
in
Town
B did manufacturing jobs and only 10
percentage
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of
people
did
services
jobs and 20
percentage
worked as sales. In 2010 over 64
percentage
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per cent of
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people
worked in the
services
sector in
Town
A and
people
who worked in manufacturing had
sharp
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a sharp
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decrease of less than 20
percentage
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. In
Town
B, most
people
still worked at manufacturers but the number of
services
and sales had increased. In conclusion, the working environment has changed in
two
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the two
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cities for 50 years more
people
prefer to work in sales or work in the
services
sector.
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