The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.
The display charts show the percentage of people working in different
sectors
in town
A and town
B. The data is about 1960, and 2010. The are three sectors
manufacturing, sales
and service. The below information describes data in percentages.
In town
A, in the year
1960, the highest was manufacturing with 41%, sales
with 30% and services
was 29%. In the year
2010, the highest was services
with 64%, sales
were 16% and manufacturing was 20%. In town
B, in the year
1960, manufacturing was 70%, sales
were 20% and services
were only 10%. however
, in the Capitalize word
However
year
2010, manufacturing was 58%, sales
were 22% and services
were 25%. But the Services
sectors
have grown very fast in town
A. There are three sectors
in town
A as well as
B.
To conclude
, the above information describes the percentage of people working in different sectors
. There has been a great difference.Submitted by purvaam383 on
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