The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.
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The display charts show the percentage of people working in different
sectors
in
town
A and
town
B. The data is about 1960, and 2010. The are three
sectors
manufacturing,
sales
and service. The below information describes data in percentages. In
town
A, in the
year
1960, the highest was manufacturing with 41%,
sales
with 30% and
services
was 29%. In the
year
2010, the highest was
services
with 64%,
sales
were 16% and manufacturing was 20%. In
town
B, in the
year
1960, manufacturing was 70%,
sales
were 20% and
services
were only 10%.
however
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, in the
year
2010, manufacturing was 58%,
sales
were 22% and
services
were 25%. But the
Services
sectors
have grown very fast in
town
A. There are three
sectors
in
town
A
as well as
B.
To conclude
, the above information describes the percentage of people working in different
sectors
. There has been a great difference.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, town, sales, year, services with synonyms.
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