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The provided line curve depicts the percentage of tourists who visited four different kinds of attractions in Birmington, England, between 1980 and 2010.

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The provided line curve depicts the percentage of
tourists
 who visited four different kinds of attractions in
Birmington
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Birmingham
, England, between 1980 and 2010. In 1980,
Pier
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the Pier
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 attraction had the lowest number of
tourists
 of the four attractions, it contains just 10 %.
This
 compared with more than 20 per
cent
 in
Art
Gallery
, approximately 23 per
cent
 in Pavillion and 30 % in Festival amusement. By 1985,
quantity
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the quantity
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 of Pier`s
visitors
 had risen from 10 to almost 15 per
cent
.
Pavilion`s
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The pavilion`s
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tourists
also
 increased by nearly 5% between 1980 and 1985.
However
,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
Festival`s
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the Festival`s
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visitors
 fell steadily from 30% to nearly 27% in the same period.
By contrast
, the
quantity
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number
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 of
visitors
in
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to
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Art
Gallery
attraction
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attractions
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 climbed sharply by approximately 22% to 38%.
The
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In the
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 years 1985 to 1995, there was
gradual
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a gradual
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 fall in the Festival`s
travelers
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travellers
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 by nearly
to
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apply
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25%,
mean
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meanwhile
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while
,
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 the
quantity
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number
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 of Pier`s guests fluctuated slightly between 1985 and 2000. Unfortunately, in the period from 1985 to
1990
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,1990
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 the
visitors
 of
Art
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to Art
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gallery
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galleries
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 declined dramatically from
at
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around 38 per
cent
 to 20 per
cent
, which value
even
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 less than
start
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the starting
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 point in 1980(22%), but later, there was a slight rise to 21% by 1995.
In contrast
 to
Art
gallery
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Gallery
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, Pavilion`s travelers increased significantly more than 1.5 times between 1985 and 1995,
however
, it
is
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dropped sharply from 1995-2000. By 2010, Pavilion`s
visitors
 fell steadily, and the trend was downward.
In the
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The
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 period from 1995 to 2010 saw the percentage of
tourists
 in Festival amusement rose gradually and
then
 levelled off. At the same time, the
quantity
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number
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 of
Art
Gallery`s
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Gallery
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visitors
 decreased dramatically from 20% to under 10% by 2010.
On the other hand
, there has been
sharp
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a sharp
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 climb in the number of Pier`s guests, at approximately 22%-was doubled what it had been in 2000.
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