The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.
The provided bar chart illustrates the number of
volunteers
and paid employees across four job positions in the sports field of an Australian town in the year 2015. Use synonyms
Overall
, the majority of Linking Words
volunteers
opted for coaching, Use synonyms
while
paid employees favoured other roles over coaching, referees and Linking Words
therapists
.
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To begin
, over 70 unpaid Linking Words
workers
took on coaching, followed by just under 60 Use synonyms
volunteers
engaging in other roles, with approximately 45 people working as Use synonyms
therapists
in 2015. Use synonyms
However
, only just over 30 Linking Words
volunteers
chose to become referees, representing the minority of unpaid Use synonyms
workers
among the four different roles.
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In contrast
, approximately 45 paid employees engaged in coaching, followed by Linking Words
therapists
and other jobs, almost 41 and just under 50 Use synonyms
workers
, respectively. Use synonyms
Additionally
, just under 40 individuals decided to work as referees, a number similar to that of Linking Words
therapists
, slightly above 40.
In conclusion, it is clearly seen that coaching was the most preferred role among Use synonyms
volunteers
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while
refereeing was the least preferred for both paid and unpaid Linking Words
workers
.Use synonyms
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