The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.
The provided bar chart illustrates the number of
volunteers
and paid employees across four job positions in the sports field of an Australian town in the year 2015. Overall
, the majority of volunteers
opted for coaching, while
paid employees favoured other roles over coaching, referees and therapists
.
To begin
, over 70 unpaid workers
took on coaching, followed by just under 60 volunteers
engaging in other roles, with approximately 45 people working as therapists
in 2015. However
, only just over 30 volunteers
chose to become referees, representing the minority of unpaid workers
among the four different roles.
In contrast
, approximately 45 paid employees engaged in coaching, followed by therapists
and other jobs, almost 41 and just under 50 workers
, respectively. Additionally
, just under 40 individuals decided to work as referees, a number similar to that of therapists
, slightly above 40.
In conclusion, it is clearly seen that coaching was the most preferred role among volunteers
while
refereeing was the least preferred for both paid and unpaid workers
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