The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
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The first diagram illustrates the development of
silkworm
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silkworms
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from
eggs
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during their life cycle,
while
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the second diagram shows the way in which
silk
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clothes are produced.
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,
it is clear that
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there are five stages illustrated in the process, commencing with the production of
eggs
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on the leaf and ending with the development of a moth. The production of
silk
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cloth begins
from
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with
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selection
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of
silk
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and ends with weaving. The first
stage
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is when moth
eggs
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are laid on a leaf and these
eggs
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hatch and come out from them after ten days. The next step
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this
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came out silkworm lavra is commencing feeding on a mulberry leaf to grow and keep a variety of healthy substances for going to another
stage
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. At
this
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point in the cycle, lavra grows approximately
four-six
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four
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months.
Overtime
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, lavra creates a
silk
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thread and spins it around itself,
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step
continuous
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for
three - four
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three-four
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days. Gradually, spinning is finished and a cocoon is formed, and after about sixteen days, a moth emerges out of the cocoon. Having completed all these steps, the lifecycle will
then
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begin again.
Firstly
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,
silk
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is selected carefully to avoid damaged threads.After that,
this
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silk
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is
then
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boiled
into
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the
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apply
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hot water and
this
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stage
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is needed to remove the sericin and
to
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apply
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soften the
fibers
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.
This
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process
also
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kills the pupa inside.
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this
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, the
silk
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fibers
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are
then
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carefully unwinded. Later, unwinded raw
silk
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is twisted into threads (the thread can be around 300-900 m). After
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silk
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the silk
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is twisted, it can be dyed, but it can
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be dyed after the
last
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stage
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which is weaving.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words eggs, silk, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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