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A glance at the four pie charts provided reveals a comparison of the population of the two countries, Yemen and Italy for the three various age groups in two different Periods, in 2000 and foresight for 2050. Overall, it is apparent from the information supplied that the remarkable change society related to 15-59-years-old during this years for both countries. In 2000, in Yemen, the old Population made up 3.6% of the total number of people in comparison with 24.1% in Italy. The 0-14 year group in Italy reached 14.3 %, which was almost 3 times higher than that of Yemen. Moreover, in Italy, the figure for 15-59 year-age was by far the most important in 2000, accounting for 61.6%, while Yemen's young population just reached 46.3 % at the same time. In 2050,the 0-14 age group in Yemen is forecasted to account for 37%, which is higher than that figure in Italy roughly 25%. While a tiny fraction of the old population is projected to record in Yemen, 42.3% of Italy's population is expected to be the elderly. The figure for Yemen and Italy's 15-59-year-old Population is predicted to occupy 57.3% and 46.2%, respectively.

A glance at the four pie charts provided reveals a comparison of the population of the two countries, Yemen and Italy for the three various age groups in two different Periods, in 2000 and foresight for 2050. Overall, it is apparent from the information supplied that the remarkable change society related to 15-59-years-old during this years for both countries. In 2000, in Yemen, the old Population made up 3.6% of the total number of people in comparison with 24.1% in Italy. The 0-14 year group in Italy reached 14.3 %, which was almost 3 times higher than that of Yemen. Moreover, in Italy, the figure for 15-59 year-age was by far the most important in 2000, accounting for 61.6%, while Yemen's young population just reached 46.3 % at the same time. In 2050,the 0-14 age group in Yemen is forecasted to account for 37%, which is higher than that figure in Italy roughly 25%. While a tiny fraction of the old population is projected to record in Yemen, 42.3% of Italy's population is expected to be the elderly. The figure for Yemen and Italy's 15-59-year-old Population is predicted to occupy 57.3% and 46.2%, respectively.
A glance at the four pie charts provided reveals a comparison of the
people
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 of the two countries,
Yemen
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 and Italy for the three various age groups in two different Periods, in 2000 and foresight for 2050.
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, it is apparent from the information supplied that the remarkable change in society related to 15-59-year-olds during these years for both countries. In 2000, in
Yemen
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, the old
people
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 made up 3.6% of the total number of
people
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 in comparison with 24.1% in Italy. The 0-14 year group in Italy reached 14.3 %, which was almost 3 times higher than that of
Yemen
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, in Italy, the figure for 15-59 year-age was by far the most important in 2000, accounting for 61.6%,
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Yemen
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's young
people
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 just reached 46.3 % at the same time. In 2050,the 0-14 age group in
Yemen
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 is forecasted to account for 37%, which is higher than that figure in Italy roughly 25%.
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 a tiny fraction of the old
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 is projected to be recorded in
Yemen
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, 42.3% of Italy's
people
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 are expected to be elderly. The figure for
Yemen
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 and Italy's 15-59-year-old
people
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 is predicted to occupy 57.3% and 46.2%, respectively.

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