The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given
barchart
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bar chart
compares
habitual
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the habitual
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behaviour of tea and coffee consumers among five different
Australian
cities
for one
month
of observation. As
it
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apply
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can be
observbed
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observed
from
three
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the three
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kind
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kinds
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of bar charts,
'Bought
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the 'Bought
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fresh coffee in
last
month
'
group
was
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apply
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experience
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experienced
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the lowest groups among
two
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the two
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other categories in all
over
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apply
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the
Australian
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apply
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mentioned
cities
.
Also
it
worth
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is worth
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to mention
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mentioning
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that in nearly all
cities
people
wants
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want
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to buy their
caffee
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coffee
or tea from a cafe. First of all, the
group
of
people
the
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who
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tends
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tended
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to be in their local cafe
in
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apply
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last
month
was more than 50% among all
Australian
cities
and
mentioned
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the mentioned
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group
was the
nearly
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apply
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most popular
genres
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genre
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among
three
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the three
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mentioned ones, with a small exception in Adelaide.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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people
whom
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who
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bought instant
coffe
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coffee
in
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apply
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last
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the last
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month
saw a steady fluctuation among all five
cities
and gained the second
frequent
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most frequent
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option for
australian
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Australian
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people
.
secondly
,
residences
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residents
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whom
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who
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wanted to
bought
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buy
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fresh coffee showed
small
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the small
a small
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descending rate of popularity among all
cities
from
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apply
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, near 45% for
sydney
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Sydney
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to 35% for Adelaide with
exeptional
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exceptional
5 percentages rose for Hobart city.
therefore
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Therefore
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this
category sits
the
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as the
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least popular
group
amoung
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among
two other one.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, cities, month, group, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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