The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.
The bar chart provides information about the change rates of international
students
among university
graduates
in various Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006.
Overall
, all Canadian universities showed a downward trend at the beginning of the period, followed by an upward trend
at the end
of the period. It is noticeable that
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New Brunswick’s
graduates
rate was about 7% in 2001, being higher than Ontario’s rate by approximately 4%.
Then
, it went up to almost 12% in 2006.
Therefore
, the proportion of
graduates
in Nova Scotia had a gradual decrease (6%), followed by
increase
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11% between 2001 and 2006.
In addition
, the proportion of international
students
in British Columbia rose as many
students
as
graduates
from Nova Scotia in 2006.
By contrast
, the percentage of
graduates
in Alberta was less than 4% in 2001, but it increased (6%)in 2006. In 2001, Quebec’s
students
had a gradual decrease.
However
, the figure experienced a steady growth
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8% in 2006. The proportion of Manitoba
graduates
decreased as many
students
as in Newfoundland and Labrador.
Then
, both
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universities experienced the same growth in 2006.
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