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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information relating to the amount of
electricity
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 produced and consumed by the top ten nations in 2014. It is obvious that China and the United
State
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 recorded the
production
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 and
consumption
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 dominating over the other countries. Another point worth mentioning is that all of
ten
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the ten
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 countries consumed their
electricity
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 reasonably, except for
Germany
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. Regarding the data of China and the US, the former took the lead in the
production
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 of 5398
billion
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kWh
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 and
consumption
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 of 5322
billion
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kWh
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, which was followed by the latter producing 4099
billion
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kWh
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 and consuming 3866
billion
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kWh
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.
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, there was a large gap between the top two countries and a huge gap with the others. With regard to the remaining nations, ranking in the top 3 was Russia which produced 1057
billion
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kWh
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 and consumed 1038
kWh
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. In terms of
production
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 and
consumption
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, the remains including Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea recorded the amount of
electricity
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 ranging from 450
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 to below 1000
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kWh
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. It is noticeable that Germany could have insufficient
electricity
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due to
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 its
consumption
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 excessing
production
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, at 582.5
billion
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 and 526.6
billion
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, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, consumption, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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