1) The line chart demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four variety months in 2014 from four countryside libraries and the pie graph shows the percentage of books,by type,that was borrowed in this time.
1) The line chart demonstrates the number of
books
that were borrowed in four variety months in 2014 from four countryside libraries and the pie graph shows the percentage of books
,by type,that was
borrowed in Correct subject-verb agreement
were
this
time.
2) Anyone can see in the graph is
that most of the Unnecessary verb
apply
books
were lend
to people in the village of Rye Slip and Sutton Wood.BecauseWrong verb form
lent
:
people of that places bought exactly 300 Remove the comma
apply
books
.In september
,Change the capitalization
September
the
Sutton Wood showed the highest outcome,but in Correct article usage
apply
june
,Rye Slip Change the capitalization
June
village
Capitalize word
Village
shows
Wrong verb form
showed
the
number of Correct article usage
a
books
that
were sold almost 300 Correct pronoun usage
apply
books
.
Also
,the sales of Sutton Wood in August were minimally 100 books
.But over the 1 month
the sales of Add a comma
,month
this
village rocketed to the
300 Correct article usage
apply
books
.
3) if
we Capitalize word
If
are talk
about the Change the verb form
are talking
countrysides
which had Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
a
least Change the article
the
sale
of Fix the agreement mistake
sales
books
.They are Church mount
and West Eaton.Both of them had a sale of around 50 Capitalize word
Mount
books
in June.Also
,the book marketing in these two countrysides
Correct your spelling
countries
were
exactly 150.
By the way,the thing to mention is the kinds of Correct subject-verb agreement
was
books
that lended
in those four villages.They are fiction,history,science and biography Correct your spelling
lived
books
.Among of
them the trading for fiction was more than Change preposition
apply
those
.Correct determiner usage
that
Furthermore
,Biography books
are in the first space in terms of number
Correct article usage
the number
books
that Change preposition
of books
borrowed
.And the Add a missing verb
are borrowed
sale
for science and history Fix the agreement mistake
sales
almost
the same with Add a missing verb
were almost
the
percentage of 14.
4) Correct article usage
a
This
is clear to us that almost quarter
of fiction Correct article usage
a quarter
books
were sold in the
2014.It is clear by Change the article
apply
pie
graph.Correct article usage
the pie
Also
,a mere 14 percent
of history and science Change the spelling
per cent
books
were lended
.Correct your spelling
lent
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