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1) The line chart demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four variety months in 2014 from four countryside libraries and the pie graph shows the percentage of books,by type,that was borrowed in this time.

1) The line chart demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four variety months in 2014 from four countryside libraries and the pie graph shows the percentage of books,by type,that was borrowed in this time.
#line #books #four #variety #months #countryside #libraries #percentage #type #time
1) The line chart demonstrates the number of
books
 that were borrowed in four variety months in 2014 from four countryside libraries and the pie graph shows the percentage of
books
,by type,that
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 borrowed in
this
 time. 2) Anyone can see in the graph
is
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apply
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that most of the
books
 were
lend
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lent
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 to people in the village of Rye Slip and Sutton Wood.Because
:
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apply
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people of that places bought exactly 300
books
.In
september
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September
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,
the
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apply
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 Sutton Wood showed the highest outcome,but in
june
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June
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,Rye Slip
village
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Village
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shows
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showed
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the
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a
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 number of
books
that
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apply
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were sold almost 300
books
.
Also
,the sales of Sutton Wood in August were minimally 100
books
.But over the 1
month
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,month
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 the sales of
this
 village rocketed to
the
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apply
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300
books
. 3)
if
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If
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 we
are talk
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are talking
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 about the
countrysides
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countryside
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 which had
a
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the
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 least
sale
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sales
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 of
books
.They are Church
mount
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Mount
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 and West Eaton.Both of them had a sale of around 50
books
 in June.
Also
,the book marketing in these two
countrysides
Correct your spelling
countries
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were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 exactly 150. By the way,the thing to mention is the kinds of
books
 that
lended
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lived
 in those four villages.They are fiction,history,science and biography
books
.Among
of
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apply
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them the trading for fiction was more than
those
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that
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.
Furthermore
,Biography
books
 are in the first space in terms of
number
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the number
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books
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of books
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 that
borrowed
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are borrowed
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.And the
sale
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sales
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 for science and history
almost
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were almost
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 the same with
the
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a
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 percentage of 14. 4)
This
 is clear to us that almost
quarter
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a quarter
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 of fiction
books
 were sold in
the
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apply
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2014.It is clear by
pie
Correct article usage
the pie
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 graph.
Also
,a mere 14
percent
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per cent
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 of history and science
books
 were
lended
Correct your spelling
lent
show examples
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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