the charts gives the information about two ggenre of tv shows watched by men and women and 4 diferent age groups in australia. the charts gives the information about two ggenre of tv shows watched by men and women and 4 diferent age groups in australia.
The bar chart provides data about two
ggenre
of tw shows watched by both genders and 4 different Correct your spelling
types
age
groups in australia
.
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Australia
Overall
, it is noticeable that the proportion of females was the highest who watch reality shows,
while
the gender of male
had the lowest. In terms of game shows, the oldest group had the largest percentage, Fix the agreement mistake
males
whereas
people
of
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aged
age
25-34 lowest.
To begin
with, the percentage of female
accounted for 70 % , Fix the agreement mistake
females
while
proportion
of Add an article
the proportion
male
namely 30%.
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males
However
, the rate of Fix the agreement mistake
females
female
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females
wathing
reality shows was the highest over the period in question.
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watching
A
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People
people
age
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aged
of
16-24 had approximately 50 % Change preposition
apply
in contrast
with people
age
45+ , Wrong verb form
aged
accounted
for under 70%.
With regards to game shows, both genders had a similar Wrong verb form
accounting
proporion
namely 62% and 60%, Correct your spelling
proportion
while
the group of oldest people
had a 70 % , which had the largest percentage overe
the period in question.
The figure for Correct your spelling
over
16
-24 Correct article usage
the 16
age
of people
had ,roughly 50 % while
the rate of Correct pronoun usage
those age
age
25-34 and 35-44 accounted for 40 %.Wrong verb form
aged
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