Task 1: The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.

Task 1: The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.
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The line graph shows the proportion of the population of different age groups in New Zealand between 1950 and 2050.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the number of people aged 0-14 will increase and the growth of the other three age groups will decline.  In 1950, nearly 60% of the population was over 65 and around 20% was aged 25-45. People who were younger than 14 only accounted for 5% of the total population. In 1990, the percentage of residents over 65
rised
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raised
rose
by 10%,
while
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the figure of 38-45 doubled to nearly 40%.
By contrast
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, a slight drop could be observed in 0-14 and 25-37. In 2050, it is predicted that the proportion of citizens over 65 and aged 25-37 will decrease by 20%, from 70% to 50% and from 20% to around 0%,
while
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the number in 38-45 dropped a little.
Conversely
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, the state aged 0-14 increased drastically from 2% to 20%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuating trends
  • Projections
  • Percentage
  • Demographic changes
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Stable
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Growth/Decline
  • Patterns
  • Historical context
  • Population dynamics
  • Trends
  • Significant shifts
  • Peaks and troughs
  • Forecasts
  • Projections
  • Analysis
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