The bar chart below shows shares of expenditure for five major categories in th United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditure for five major categories in th United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, Japan in the year 2009.
The provided bar chart demonstrates rates of expenditure for five major categories in America, Canada, England and
Japan
in distinct years of 2009. The essay describes the main features and compares the information.
Overall
, it is certain that the major shares of spending in housing, food and transportation sectors in
four
countries during the year. Though they spend most finances on fundamental tasks, health care and clothing are always less considered than others. With regards to the housing sector, the
four
states' rate of expenditure was above five quarters which was prominent among others. Among them, the outlay of housing shares was high peaking above 25%, in England 24%,
Japan
21% and Canada 20% respectively.
Besides
, the trajectory of food spending portions was above 12% in all nations.
For example
, the major portion was
Japan
at above 20%, and after that other states. Meanwhile, on the topic of transportation,
four
nations cost rate more than 10% in 2009.
On the other hand
, the clothing and healthcare sectors were always replenished from others for the
four
provinces. In clothing, Canada's cost rate was higher above 5% than England's at 6%,
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4% and the USA's at above 3%.
Finally
, the United States spent a high amount of share in health care perspective
such
as 8% and the other three countries cost less than 5 per cent in 2009.
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