You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter, ● ask what types of membership are available and what the prices are ● ask what activities are available ● and ask what the joining procedure is

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Dear Sir or Madam I am asking the manager to join the sports field opened in your

neighborhood

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. I want to see what kind of equipment the new sports field is made of. I want to get acquainted with the conditions there. The purpose of my neighbourhood is to make friends there. My goal is to achieve many achievements in the sport I am a member of. I want my parents to be proud of my achievements. Faithfully, Mehriniso

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task achievement

Make sure to directly answer all questions listed in the task. Include specific inquiries about membership types, prices, activities, and the joining procedure.

coherence cohesion

Work on developing a clear logical structure by organizing your paragraphs around different questions from the prompt.

coherence cohesion

Consider using specific paragraphs to address each question in the prompt for better clarity and organization.

general positive

Your greeting and sign-off are polite and suitable for a formal letter.

general positive

You display an eagerness to engage with the gym and its community, which sets a positive tone for your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

79 words

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You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter, ● ask what types of membership are available and what the prices are ● ask what activities are available ● and ask what the joining procedure is

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

In some countries, the government is encouraging business and industries to move outside city center and relocate to regional areas. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information such as their hobbies and interests,and whether they are married or single.some people say that this information may be relevant and useful.others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that parents of children who break the law should be punished as they are responsible for their children’s actions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture.We can learn as much as from books, films, and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?