The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make

comparisons where relevant.
The given graph depicts information about the proportion change in the number of overseas graduates
student
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from universities in various Canadian
provinces
between 2001 and 2006. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is clearly apparent that there was a big
differences
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in the number of graduates university student in most of the
provinces
in both years. In 2006, the New Brunswick province had the highest
international
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students who graduated from the university which almost
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12%. It
then
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followed by Nova Scotia and British Colombia
provinces
that had almost similar
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which was around 13%. The least popular province
in
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this
year was Alberta with only
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more than 4%. In 2001,
the
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New Brunswick and Nova Scotia
also
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the most beloved
provinces
with more than 6%
graduate
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students.
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famous destinations were Uebec and Alberta
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had approximately more than 4%. The province with the lowest percentage of International
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graduate students
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was Ontario (3%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words provinces with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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