The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given graph depicts information about the proportion change in the number of overseas graduates

student

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from universities in various Canadian

provinces

between 2001 and 2006. Looking from an

overall

perspective, it is clearly apparent that there was a big

differences

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in the number of graduates university student in most of the

provinces

in both years. In 2006, the New Brunswick province had the highest

international

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students who graduated from the university which almost

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12%. It

then

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followed by Nova Scotia and British Colombia

provinces

that had almost similar

percentage

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which was around 13%. The least popular province

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this

year was Alberta with only

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more than 4%. In 2001,

the

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New Brunswick and Nova Scotia

also

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the most beloved

provinces

with more than 6%

graduate

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students.

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famous destinations were Uebec and Alberta

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had approximately more than 4%. The province with the lowest percentage of International

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graduate students

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was Ontario (3%).

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