Some people think that the government should fund music, dance and arts lessons for children. Others think that they should be funded by private businesses or by children's families. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Music

,

dance

and

arts

covers

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everything in the world. In fact, nowadays is hard to find someone

that

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is not a

music

,

dance

or

an

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art

lover.

However

, some people think that the government have to fund

music

,

dance

and

arts

lessons

for

children

, in my

opinion

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the government

have not

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has

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to fund them. On the one

hand

,

i

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recognize that

music

,

dance

and

arts

are really important but

on the other

hand

I think,

also

, that other hobbies

such

as

:

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volleyball, tennis are important too. So,

i

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think that the government can't pay for every

hobbies

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that our

children

want to do.

Also

, nowadays most

of

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the

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schools

allow students to receive

music

and

art

lessons

. In fact, during

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middle and high school not only,

every

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students

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student

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in

italy

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Italy

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have to follow

art

lessons

with a degree teacher in

this

type of field; but

also

during the three years of middle

school

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,school

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you can receive more hours after school to improve a specific instrument.

Moreover

, there are

specifics

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specific

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music

,

dance

and

art

high

schools

with

a

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various

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programs

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program

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programs

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based on what you want to learn

such

as a violin

instead

of a guitar for

music

high

schools

,

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or

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sculpture

instead

of pottery

of

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art

high

schools

, or maybe classical

instead

of modern ballets for

dance

high

schools

. So, on the one

hand

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you have to pay

every

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for every

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stuff or

instruments

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instrument

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that you need to follow the

lessons

but

on the other

hand

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you do not

to

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have to pay for anything. So, in my

opinion

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every

families

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family

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can allow

children

to follow

music

,

dance

and

art

lessons

without spending too much.

To conclude

, in my

opinion

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the

goverments

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governments

government

do not have to fund

music

,

dance

and

arts

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art

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lessons

for

children

because there are so many other opportunities to improve and grow

children

's hobbies without spending a lot of money.