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The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph provides information about the maximum daily average temperature of certain two
cities
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 in New Zealand and the United Kingdom from January to December.
Overall
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, temperature variations in four
cities
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 occur in the middle of the
year
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, primarily from May to September. Meanwhile, the two
cities
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 in New Zealand begin and end the
year
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 with warmer weather than the United Kingdom. Temperatures in Auckland and Christchurch range from 25 to 18
degrees
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Celsius
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 from January to April.
In contrast
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, the cooler months in both
cities
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 begin in May and end in September, with temperatures ranging from 10 to 15
degrees
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Celsius
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 until it warms up again.
Although
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 Christchurch remained lower in condition than Auckland throughout the
year
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, the gap between the two remains relatively small. London and Edinburgh,
on the other hand
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, see polar opposite weather patterns, with January in both
cities
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 beginning at around 5
degrees
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Celsius
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 and rising to up to 15-20
degrees
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Celsius
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 in July. In comparison to New Zealand
cities
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, the United Kingdom has a warmer climate between May and September, with temperatures averaging 20-22
degrees
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.
Finally
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, Edinburgh and London finish the
year
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 with about 6
degrees
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Celsius
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 before the new
year
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 begins.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, year, degrees, celsius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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