The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
During the year 1918, the percentage of
people
owning their own
accommodation
was far less than the one that rented their
accommodation
. It shows about 76% of
people
rented their
home
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homes
show examples
. About 22% of the
people
have their own
accommodation
. In 1939, the number of
people
owning their
accommodation
increased to about 31% but it is still not as much as the 68% of the
people
having to rent their
accommodation
even though it decreased. The
amount
of rented and owned
accommodation
stayed the same during 1953. The owned
accommodation
then
continues to increase from 31% to about 41% as the rented
accommodation
decreases to around 59%. In 1971, the
amount
of rented and owned
accommodation
were both 50%. After that the percentage of
people
renting their
accommodation
while
the
amount
of
people
owning their own
accommodation
beats the rented one. During 2001 the
amount
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number
show examples
of
people
owning their own
accommodation
slowed down to 69%.
Then
, in 2011, it decreased to about 63%
while
the rented
accommodation
increased from around 31% to 36%.
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