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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays.

It is commonly argued that some bosses want to contact the
employees
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 all the
time
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 even on their days off. (template) that the disadvantages of
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 statement outweigh the advantages. On the one hand, there are several benefits of contacting
employees
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 all the
time
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. In general, most
o
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officers are required
too
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 probably respond and it is important to
maintaining
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 a connection with the
employees
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 during their off-hours in case of urgency. It is
also
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 possible to say that
instead
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 of waiting for the employee to return from holiday, the employer can contact him urgently to complete the task beforehand without wasting any precious
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 .
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, some signaturestypese of jobs like doctors, event managers,and accident insurance ask for the optimal process, the convenience.
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, there are a lot of drawbacks
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, everyone
need
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 their "after
work
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"
time
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 for themselves and or their own relationships
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 as family. If one person
spend
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 too much attention on
work
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, they do not have any quality association, they live like
zombie
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 because
without
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work
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, they are
noting
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nothing
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 at all.
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, uninterrupted connection
make
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employee
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the employee
an employee
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 feel annoyed and stressed, which lead to bad health, mentally and physically. No one loves their job 100%, most of us just
work
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 for the salary and use it to pay for certain needs. Contacting more than usual
seem
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 like
draging
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dragging
 the worker out of their true reality, and the question is: is it imperative? If contracts of companies do not mention that
employees
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 have to cut off everything else and force them to receive calls or emails 24/24, they could not support to do
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, maintaining
the
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contact
between
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with
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 people at
work
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 is important, but each
of
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company
need
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needs
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 to
considerate
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consider
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this
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 term because the disadvantages are more than
advantages
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the advantages
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enhanced communication
  • immediate problem-solving
  • emergency situations
  • increased productivity
  • real-time feedback
  • project management
  • customer satisfaction
  • employee burnout
  • job satisfaction
  • mental health
  • professional and personal life boundaries
  • stress
  • autonomy
  • workplace morale
  • turnover rates
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