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some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification

#university #students #subjects #addition #time #attention #qualification
These days, a group of university
students
 have
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to learn
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in learning
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 about unrelated
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subjects
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 to their major
in addition
 to
thier
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their
the
main
subjects
.
While
,
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others
 have the opposite view which is
students
 should focus only
in
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 studying
subjects
 which relate to
thier
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their
 qualification.
This
 essay is going to discuss both views and I totally with the view that
others
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subjects
 are very important for the future of
students
. On the one hand, many
universities
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students
 believe that
others
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other
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subjects
such
 as communication skills
consider
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as
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an
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essential
subjects
 in the future path of
the
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students
.
For example
, if the student who
study
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studies
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 education has
additional
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an additional
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 subject
such
 as communication skills subject that thing helps
students
 to communicate with
others
 like other teachers or student’s parents easily without any difficulties.
To sum up
, non-essential
subjects
 are as important as the main
subjects
.
On the other hand
,
others
 argue that additional
subjects
 to the main
subjects
consider
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as
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heavy things
to
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 the busy schedule of
students
. That
mean
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,
students
 have a lot of assessments, projects and
quizies
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quizzes
.
However
, they spend a lot of time
in
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on
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 them
instead
to study
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of studying
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 the main
subjects
.
Thus
,
according to
 some
students
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 non-essential
subjects
 may badly affect the education of some
students
. In
conclustion
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conclusion
, there are two views regarding
to
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the additional
subjects
. The first group say that
non essential
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subjects
 have
good
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 impact
in
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student’s
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students’
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 future like communication skills. The second group has
other point
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 of view which is these
subjects
 may
effects
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affect
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 badly in the main
subjects
due to
spend
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 time in them.
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