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some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification

#university #students #subjects #addition #time #attention #qualification
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These days, a group of university
students
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interest
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to learn
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in learning
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 about unrelated
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subjects
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 to their major
in addition
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 to
thier
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their
the
main
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.
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,
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others
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 have the opposite view which is
students
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 should focus only
in
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 studying
subjects
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 which relate to
thier
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their
 qualification.
This
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 essay is going to discuss both views and I totally with the view that
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others
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other
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subjects
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 are very important for the future of
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. On the one hand, many
universities
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students
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 believe that
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others
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other
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subjects
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such
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 as communication skills
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as
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an
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essential
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 in the future path of
the
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students
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, if the student who
study
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studies
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 education has
additional
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an additional
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 subject
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 as communication skills subject that thing helps
students
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 to communicate with
others
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 like other teachers or student’s parents easily without any difficulties.
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, non-essential
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 are as important as the main
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.
On the other hand
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,
others
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 argue that additional
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 to the main
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consider
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as
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apply
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heavy things
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for
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 the busy schedule of
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. That
mean
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,
students
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 have a lot of assessments, projects and
quizies
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quizzes
.
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, they spend a lot of time
in
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instead
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to study
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of studying
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 the main
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,
according to
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 some
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students
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 non-essential
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 may badly affect the education of some
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. In
conclustion
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conclusion
, there are two views regarding
to
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the additional
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. The first group say that
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subjects
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good
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 impact
in
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student’s
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 future like communication skills. The second group has
other point
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 of view which is these
subjects
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 may
effects
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 badly in the main
subjects
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due to
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spend
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 time in them.
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