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The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.

The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.
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The pie chart analyses the nutrient values of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks. In terms of three distinct nutritious
components
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 name
sodium
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, hydrogenated fat and added sweeteners in the USA per meal.
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, it can be seen that people do not like to eat a balanced breakfast. During ,breakfast Individuals like to have nearly equal amounts of nutritious
components
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 as 14% , 16%, and 16% with respective
components
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 of
sodium
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, saturated fat and added sweeteners.
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, there are drastic variations shown by population in the snack pattern, as masses like to have nearly half of the added sugar (42%) in comparison to the other two
components
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 which are reported a fifth of fat and one in fourteen
sodium
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. People like to have the highest amount of salt and hydrogenated fat during their dinner time with a minimum amount of sugar.
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, people
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 like to follow the same pattern in moderate levels with their lunch by considering the higher level of
sodium
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 and fat but less proportion of the added sugar.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words components, sodium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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