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Percentage of UK people who consumed daily recommended amount of fruit and vegetable in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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This
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 table illustrates the rate of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 consumed as recommended in 2002, 2006 and 2010. The data is split into three categories i.e.
men
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,
women
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 and
children
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.
To begin
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 with, the rate of consumption of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 by
women
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 is highest in the year 2002 which is around 25%.
On the other hand
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,
children
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 take
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 recommended to them in less quantity i.e. 11% in 2002.
Moreover
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,
men
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 consumed around 22% of recommended
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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.
Furthermore
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, there is an optimistic increase in the consumption of recommended
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 by all in the year 2006 i.e.
men
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 consumed 26%,
women
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 consumed 32%
whereas
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,
children
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 consumed 18%.
In Addition
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, the utilization of recommended
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 decreased in 2010 . In conclusion, the data exhibits that
women
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 are taking
the
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apply
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fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 as recommended which means that
women
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 are more sensitive about their health but
men
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 and
children
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 do not take their health seriously.

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