The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The six
shown
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pie charts compare the
consumation's
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consumation
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rate
of
water
in industrial, agricultural and
finally
domestic
usage
method
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methods
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in six different parts of
world
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the world
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including
Europe
. As
it
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apply
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can be seen in all
pie
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the pie
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chart,
countries
almost
has
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have
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the same
rate
of consuming
water
among
three
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the three
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different methods
therefor
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therefore
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agricultural use of
water
has been the most wasting
method
for
entire
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the entire
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given areas.
In
contrast
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,contrast
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rate
of
usage
of
water
in
household
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the household
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group has been the lowest
water
consumation
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consumption
consummation
of
water
for almost all
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the metioned
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metioned
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mentioned
parts of
world
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the world
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, except for South America. Agricultural use of
water
is the greatest
method
for
water
usage
's percentage. In
second
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the second
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countries's
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countries'
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rows
rate
of
water
usage
in rural fields for growing
plant
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plants
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has gained more than 80
percentages
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per cent
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and for
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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row
rate
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the rate
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of
water
usage
in agriculture has dropped slightly to
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a percentage's
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percentage's
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percentage
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number of more than 35
percentages
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per cent
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with
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a exeptional
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exeptional
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exceptional
number of 32
percentages
for
Europe
that industrial
usage
are
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is
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the most
rate
of
cosumation
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consumption
consummation
.
In
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the other
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other
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another hand
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hand
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domestic
water
usage
has been dramatically the lowest
rate
of
usage
with
average
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an average
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number of
less
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fewer
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than 10
percentages
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per cent
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but
like
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it
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has been shown in
charts
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the charts
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house hold
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household
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usage
rose slightly higher in American and
Europe
countries
with
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in
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comparison
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a comparison
the comparison
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of
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to
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Asia's
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Asia
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and
Afirca's
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Africa's
countries
.As
it
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apply
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can be
abservbed
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absorbed
observed
industrial
method
for
water
usage
is more than 45
percentages
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per cent
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for modern
countries
like
Europe
and
USA
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the USA
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, water, usage, method, europe, countries, percentages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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