The line graph grap illustrates the changes in employment trends over a period of 70 years in the United States

The line graph grap illustrates the changes in employment trends over a period of 70 years in the United States
The line graph graph depicts the number of employment trends in the USA over 70 years; in a variety of work which are A agriculture, Manufacturing and
services
.
overall
, that clearly can be seen the percentage of employees in
services
and Manufacturing are the two jobs people prefer from 1977 to 2025.
According to
the line graph
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we can observe that, the figure of people who work in Agriculture is to compared with other careers,
However
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the rate of
services
and manufacturing grew dramatically.
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,
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agriculture began at 80% in 1977 to decline by 40%
at the end
of the period , the rate of the
services
dawning rate started gradually to peak at 80% in 2025.in order
the
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final results
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the large proportion of people working in
services
until 2025.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words services with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • employment trends
  • period of 70 years
  • United States
  • changes
  • trends
  • overview
  • patterns
  • initial changes
  • significant shifts
  • impact
  • economic factors
  • findings
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