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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided illustration describes information on collecting rainwater with using it as drinking
water
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 in one of the towns of Australia.
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,
this
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proccess
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process
 requires the getting a done-drinking
water
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 from simply
rainnwater
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rainwater
.
This
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water
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 is mixing with chemicals, before coming people. First of all,
water
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 from rain falls to drain.
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, by
severage
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leverage
canals
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,canals
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 it goes to
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water
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the water
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 filter for sorting. After
successul
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successful
 sorting, it moves to storage for keeping
product
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the product
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.
Then
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, it will pass to
water
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 treatment. Every stage is linked by pipes. It is interesting to note
than
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that
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 after
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last
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the last
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 level it will follow to pipes.
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, before
go
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for
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to
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owner
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the owner
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, it will pass the mixing with chemicals. As far as
i'm
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I'm
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concerd
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concerned
that
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apply
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it will
better
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be better
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off
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apply
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for
community's
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the community's
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 health. Without sorting by chemicals,
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the pubic
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pubic
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public
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 can not drink
water
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 without
well
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good
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intention
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intentions
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. I tend to say
to
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apply
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that drinking
water
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 after mixing - reached
to
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apply
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customers.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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