The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The provided illustration describes information on collecting rainwater with using it as drinking
water
in one of the towns of Australia.
Overall
, this
proccess
requires the getting a done-drinking Correct your spelling
process
water
from simply rainnwater
. Correct your spelling
rainwater
This
water
is mixing with chemicals, before coming people.
First of all, water
from rain falls to drain. Therefore
, by severage
Correct your spelling
leverage
canals
it goes to Add a comma
,canals
water
filter for sorting. After Correct article usage
the water
successul
sorting, it moves to storage for keeping Correct your spelling
successful
product
. Add an article
the product
Then
, it will pass to water
treatment. Every stage is linked by pipes.
It is interesting to note than
after Correct word choice
that
last
level it will follow to pipes. Correct article usage
the last
However
, before go
Change the verb form
going
for
Change preposition
to
owner
, it will pass the mixing with chemicals. As far as Add an article
the owner
i'm
Change the capitalization
I'm
concerd
Correct your spelling
concerned
that
it will Correct word choice
apply
better
Add a missing verb
be better
off
for Rephrase
apply
community's
health. Without sorting by chemicals, Correct article usage
the community's
Correct article usage
the pubic
pubic
can not drink Correct your spelling
public
water
without well
Change the adverb
good
intention
. I tend to say Fix the agreement mistake
intentions
to
that drinking Change preposition
apply
water
after mixing - reached to
customers.Change preposition
apply
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