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The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for thte future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for thte future.
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This
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 line chart illustrates the job trends in 3 different sections through the 50-year period. The units are in millions.
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, we can see that even though all 3 types of employment had different behaviours there was the same
number
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 in 1980 at 40
million
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.
Also
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, a
number
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 of Services ended at a high rate. For the Services job, there were the increased numbers from 10
million
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 in 1975 to 40
million
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 in 1980. The rate has been significantly increasing to 90
million
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 in 2025.
Moreover
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, despite facing the same behaviour as Services, the Manufacturing job rate sharply plumped to less than 20
million
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 and
then
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 steadily fell to 10
million
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 in 2025.
Lastly
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, for Agriculture, the
number
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 stayed steady until 1977 at 80
million
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 and dramatically dropped to 45
million
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 in 1979. It met the same point at 40
million
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 in 1980
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 had decreased
number
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 as Manufacturing at 10
million
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 in 2025.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trends" in your introduction.
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