You and your relatives are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel making the arrangements. Let them know when you will be arriving and leaving, what type of rooms you would like, and ask them how much the weekend will cost. Also enquire about activities and places of interest near the hotel.

Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing to book two en-suite
rooms
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from
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at
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your hotel. I am planning to stay there between the 12th and 14th of September just for
weekend
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the weekend
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. I will arrive there on Friday at 02:00pm and leave on Sunday at 12:30pm. My sister will accompany
with
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apply
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me,
therefore
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, we need two
rooms
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on the same floor. Could you please make sure that both
rooms
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should be
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are
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non-smoker
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non-smoking
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room
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rooms
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. It would be great if you book these
rooms
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overlooking the
see
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sea
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. We want to
entertain
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use
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all hotel facilities
,
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;
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therefore
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, I am hoping
to
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that
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all are operating. Could you please inform
about
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me about
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the total cost for two nights per person and accepted payment methods? We would like to visit some interesting places which are close to your hotel. Could you do some recommendations about what kinds of activities are
avalibale
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available
.
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?
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Moreover
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, I would be happy if you
do
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could make
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some suggestions about the places. I am looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Best Regards, Jane Fonda

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structure
Break the letter into clean parts. Use new lines for a new idea.
content
Ask about the price for the whole stay and for two rooms on the same floor; keep the money part simple.
grammar
Fix bad words. Use 'sea view' and 'non-smoking' and simple clean grammar.
tone
Polite tone and clear request of needs.
format
Good opening and closing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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