The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in employment in the UK, by education level.

The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in employment in the UK, by education level.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in employment in the UK, by education level.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph demonstrates the estimated and recorded employment proportion in the UK
rely
Verb problem
based

There may be a verb use issue here.

show examples
on education level between 1990 and 2025.
Overall
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the percentages of high school or Bachelor's
degree
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees

It seems that degree may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
increased
whereas
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

the remaining group decreased gradually
overtime
Correct your spelling
over time

The word overtime doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

show examples
.
Moreover
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, their proportions will continue to incline or decline as their past trends. In 1990, there were no employees with any certification programs,
however
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the percentage of Bachelor's
degree holding
Add a hyphen
degree-holding

It seems that degree holding is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

show examples
employees increased
around
Change preposition
by around

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
10% in 2000
,
Remove the comma
apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma in a compound predicate. Consider removing it.

show examples
and fluctuated at
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

level until 2015. It will increase by 5% in 2025.
On the other hand
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the ratio of employees with high school graduation
certificate
Fix the agreement mistake
certificates

It seems that certificate may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
gradually increased to 10% in 2005. In 2010, it rose approximately 25% before climbing 30% in 2020. Despite the fact that non-educated citizens and people with Master's degrees had the same rate of employment in 1990,
disparity
Add an article
the disparity

The noun phrase disparity seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
between them increased over decades.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: